Doctor Felix Whooves

Koach I don't know but I think there should be a topic hear were we can Post stores and ideas for criticism to help us become better writers

I don't understand this stuff some one pleas explain I'm so confused I hear about them in school but have no idea what they really are

Cool story bro. I liked it I give it an 8 maby all of us hear can co write a prity good book

As for me I'm a man, well I was the last time I checked... Could it, no no that cant happen. Or can it? ... I'll be right back ... ... ... Ok yes I'm still a man

Rarity I have the same problem ^_^

I would love to meat Natani from the webcomic twokinds he/she was born a girl and still is one but not after a f up magic spell her sexual identity I'd that of a man. She isn't the main character and only comes in half way throw the story but she is still an epic character and the comic is definitely werth checking out.

KT that is a very good story I love it, is that all you have because it is so good I would pay for the book when it's done.' Ps is your avitar the same half animal kid in your story? Pps I have to say it agen... That was brilliant and at a professional level if it's not done yet then you NEED to FINISH IT I'm allredy hooked. ^_^

The Hamburglar I like the feel of it and it has good potential but you kept saying the same thing over some times that can be a good thing but I think you over did it I give it a 6.8

I can tell that I'm going to met some interesting people hear if not make some new friends

Ok "Bill" give me a day and I'll come up with some ideas.

BillyLudwick Wow ... Just wow you are a very good writer I love the comedy scattered in your writing And you have a very strong ending... Maybe we can cowrite something? I know I'm not that good at the writing part of writing but where I shine is in the mane plot/ premiss of the story.

Thanks for the help, I know there is a LOT of spelling mistakes ( I'm dyslexic ) and the story is only 2 days old so it needs a lot more time for it to grow but it is only one of several things I'm writing for. The best one yet is a video game some of my friends and I are creating. PS BillyLudwick you told me in an other post that you also are a writer. I was wondering what you Wrote/ wrote for? PPS thank you blue, you really think the idea is an 8 o_0 wow thanks

Hello you can call me Felix I'm 17 I live in the US. I plan on being a writer when I graguate I've bean following the forum for a while now but only just created an account. Umm oh yah I'm also a Mormon so feel free to ask me any questions you want about that.

Ok this is my first book ( I'm still in high school ) hear are the first cupel pages It was a cloudy gray day. The air smelled sweat, as it dose just before a storm. The worn paper and scattered trash crunched and crumbled beneath his tattered shoes. His torn frayed close ruined with sweat and blood ( some his but mostly others ) hung off his gaunt malnourished form. The eyes in head were bleak as they gazed at the abandoned bindings. About half were chard from long ago fires but they all looked as dead as there foamier occupants must be by now. In the background he could hear the screaming rower of oncoming horde of these beyond death. The blood from the bite on his arm flowed down his arm past the mangled pipe he held and on to cracked pavement. He then turned to the face the battle he knew he could never win. He stared at them, the "rejuvenated" most looked ether dead or well on there way to being the same, but some the first ones looked like beauty in it's purist form. The more excited ones sprinted for him but were torn in half. The raiser wire he set up could only hold off ten or so of the rejens but it helped to slow them down, they would be distracted by the blood. All was with the blood. It would only slow them down for but a minuet this was not the flesh they needed. Using the opportunity he grabbed a bag from off his belt and throw it a deep in to the mass of madness. He hated to think of what they had to do to get this stuff but he couldn't argue with results... At lest not for long. The rejens swarmed around the smell with savage intent. This would keep them occupied for 5 minutes, he only had 3 more bags. 20 minutes was all he had left until he was "consumed" and the strangest thing was that he was not scared. His sacrifice didn't mean much, he was already a dead man walking and in more then one way but at lest he could give the rest an opportunity to live. So just tell me what you think and tell me how it is on a scale of 1 to 10