Poem I Wrote for School

[Razor235]

Here is a poem that I had to create for school. Tell me what you think! The form is a villanelle, a very hard form to write.

 

I lay here on my bed,

staring at the stars,

a while ago the sky was red.

 

Thinking of all I love and dread,

of this planet that is now ours,

I lay here on my bed.

 

The darkness weighs me down like lead,

Save for the moon and its deep scars,

a while ago the sky was red.

 

I think of all the places upon which I desire to tread,

places such as Mars,

I lay here on my bed.

 

The books that I have read,

taking me places afar,

a while ago the sky was red.

 

The sun comes up, fiery red,

Shining brightly, drowning out those stars.

I lay here on my bed,

now again the sky is red.

[Very7684]

Very nice bro, I like it. Great A-B-A rhyme scheme and all together great style ":)